Lord Anzius

Nice..... Jellow Here I am. I did not get across. the elders used a device, carved out of stone, an arch, great gargoyles on either side, like pillars. Their tongues ...

Great work!!!!! But this part I think you should reconsider: Are created by us Next thing we know That kid you laughed at blow’s up a school bus!!! Why not: ...

When ever I am sad it Should be Whenever. Punctuation! But otherwise very good.!!! Keep it up. ************************* Lord Anzius WUZ here :smt029

Okay. Here it is: The boredom of three math hours left me half asleep at my desk with the pencil in my numb hand strangely pointed towards the teacher. My ...

WOAH... What can I say? It was funny (for sure.) It was different. It was... well GREAT. But it sounded like a rap :shock: weird :roll: Hee hee Maybe with ...

Well written. The tally man of hell pressed a button on his chair. The button was green and big. It was like one of those buttons you shouldn´t press, but ...

ooookay. I accidentally read the second chapter first... sorry. Everyone gasped. "Are you sure of your facts Por?" Barr asked. "I have been researching it for twenty years...unless I have ...

okay... nice. Not too many mistakes (that I saw). So far, she was the only person ever to leave the valley. Somehow, that made her felt lonely. don't you mean ...

Interesting start. I would say. The setting is good and all, but this would have worked better as a prologue. Because, in a chapter you normally have more description: for ...

Oooh. I see what thou has presented before my eyes. And I, the merciful Lord, says thath thou has written a magnificent piece. I must say, though that this work, ...

Your death is really different from mine that's true. That was so funny. :lol: But now to the reviewing: I didn't really find anything to make better... but one thing ...

I'll start with the good points: I loved it. It was really good thanks to the good word choises and the fact that you used enough description. You construct the ...

Did Lioz forget him??????? Why do they fight all the time? Toooo confusing. Why did all of the people run to help him? What is the steaming rock? Where are ...

Your wife slapped my wife.... punch. I laughed. :lol: Here Is my critt, Still some VERY weird names. But it's just fine. I like them. Keep it up. A steaming ...

Resieved a gold star. Instant gold. great work.. I can't come up with anything... I think I have used up my criticue power for today or this was just perfect. ...